Limber the Hawlucha, where spirital power is truth!

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Limber the Hawlucha, where spirital power is truth!

Post by 13InHeaven on Wed Nov 25, 2015 2:49 pm

Hey guys, I guess I got to start by posting my Character, so here it is!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/15nLn6X2m_TuMK_BVT6kPEWGNpu6drBIEnPjwzCo38cA/edit?usp=docslist_api

Give me feedback and I will announce my updates!
In Freeroam, i'll be him!
After episode 15, i'll change to my Fletchling OC!

See ya soon all!
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Re: Limber the Hawlucha, where spirital power is truth!

Post by 13InHeaven on Sat Nov 28, 2015 6:45 am

Yay! Last time update:
Limber has grown 20 levels!
Limber has 4 friends now!
And... He got a house!
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Re: Limber the Hawlucha, where spirital power is truth!

Post by LargeJellopy on Wed Dec 09, 2015 11:45 am

So, I figured that I'd wait until Limber had an actual bio to comment here...
Then, after a while, I see an update that happened some weeks ago and come to check...
And, surprisingly enough, it could be still much, much more fleshed out, hmm.

Where are the four friends he met?
What is the "everything" he learned on Cyllage City?
Was he taught by humans, by other Hawlucha, by other Pokémon?
How did he develop this uncommon power of sensing souls? Did it have something to do with Meditite/Medicham, Fighting/Psychic Pokémon that you can also find in Kalos?
How does his soul sense work?
What is his house like?
Why doesn't he like shy people?

I'm sorry if I come off as rude, this is not my intention, but I'm perfectly honest in saying that I think this bio needs a lot of fleshing out before one can properly comment on it /hmm
May we meet later!

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Re: Limber the Hawlucha, where spirital power is truth!

Post by PurplePeahen on Wed Dec 09, 2015 7:59 pm

Everything with LargeJellopy I agree with. I think something you need to add to the doc is more details, especially about his personality.
I can only get that Limber hates shy people for an odd reason, but that's all we know about his personality, so perhaps adding a section describing it will help your character. And, of course, adding more detail to the backstory will create a deeper character.

Feel free to ignore my advice, but these are just my thoughts.

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Re: Limber the Hawlucha, where spirital power is truth!

Post by 13InHeaven on Thu Dec 10, 2015 3:18 am

Well, I should follow it and add it this weekend.
Thanks for the advice!

Wierd things happen and I actually can't keep up with it.
Hoping to update cool things!
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