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Labyrinth an exploring madness

Post by Kevinselvan on Thu Nov 17, 2016 6:49 am

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ENXuvFwPWhgzkGJE6_QLEZajdXpismrnoI5U8pcurDc/edit
My first custom in a while now

a lot of help is appriciated
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Post by Rotom's Pokedex on Mon Nov 21, 2016 5:58 am

Hello.

The idea of your doc is decent, but the doc feels rather.. Messy- the words feel jumbled, not much of a good explanation of what is going on, and a contrasting background color. It's an eyesore, per se. What I recommend doing is adding proper punctuations and fixing some words in necessary places, ex:

Welcome to the Labyrinth.. The one-time place where you may smile- even if you die. Here, monsters linger around- and they're out for your own blood. However, one thing is certain- this is the place where dreams come true. Your journey starts in your hometown- Hien, the closest city next to the labyrinth. Your quest..? To explore, of course!

I hope I can be of assistance. -Rotom
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Post by Kevinselvan on Mon Nov 21, 2016 7:21 am

finally someone who actually answered! i am on it
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